if ever one
was to
know
it was she
in truth
at that time I believed
that she knew
everything
such certainty
is a boon
in troubled times
but she
was long ago
and her fallibility
now seems as clear
in hindsight
as it is distressing
for we need the reassurance
that someone
knows
and can give
guidance
it is hard
to believe
I could ever have been
so naïve
and yet
I clung to her counsel
as though it were
the new gospel
of nineteen seventy-four
only realizing
my error
in nineteen
night-eight
and now . . .
a day will bring
what it must
none of it
better
than what was brought
before
~
Intriguing
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I’ll probably discard this piece, Derrick. Looking for a way in to a new section of my current endeavur.
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I think you should continue with this theme, Frank, although to be fair the audience may be small.
What I would like to know is what is/was it to her?
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Thanks for the feedback, Tracy. I think I can do better with this character. As you say, some questions not answered, and I’d like to make a bigger bang with her.
It’s a wonderfully engaging exercise.
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Sounds very challenging to me, Frank. Enjoy. 🙂
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I think I’ve resolved what I was unhappy with, Tracy. The subsequent piece ties it together for me, I think
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I’m thinking that the person the speaker is addressing is his or her mother?
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The character is based on a person I knew, but I’m not sure this is the way I will want her to be introduced. The poem is a bit of a try out. I’ll write another approach tonight, I think. Will keep both and look at them down the track.
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