Poem #167 from a series of poems drawn from the imagination and collected as: a Bachelard reverie.
Back to Bachelard and me – Introduction
it’s a long way
down
when you know
that there’s a half
a mile
of dirt
and rock
above you
and the space you’ve carved
for yourself to move
is only two men
wide
you have to
shore
your tunnels
keep the pump
primed
and pushing out water
and keep the light
on your helmet
alive
I
went down there
pick-axe
in my hand
and no concern
for risk
or for danger
breathing black
shitty dust
in the eternity
of black
shitty night
where I could not see
my hand
there
right before my eyes
and my ears filled up
with god
god
choosing that deep time
to start talking
but I plinked
and I plunked with my pick
and did my best
to keep his voice
outside
of my head
because I needed clear mind
for the work
it is a soul
down there
some kind of spirit
I’d sit down
on a break
no light
no sound at all
but my breathing
and I could see
I swear
six different kinds
of blackness
the working
of a heart
is a loud call too
its sound
is a determined beat
and it would fill all the tunnels
right up
with me
like a claim I’d staked
but
I didn’t really
belong there
I didn’t own
any part of that creature
I only
stole
I stole all the ore
that ever gleamed
or glittered
in my light
and
thief that I was
I don’t think the mountain
squatting up there above me
ever even knew
that I was alive
I stole the ore out
I was a miner
and a thief
but
half a mile down
somehow
I learned
to pray
© Frank Prem 2018
Bachelard and me Poem #168: oneiric elements #3
An excellent portrayal of a nightmare existence
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The grim black. Thanks Derrick. Glad the poem conveys.
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Really captured the feeling. I have claustrophobia. I don’t know how anyone could do that work.
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It’d be pretty bad, R. Couldn’t stand it, myself, I don’t think.
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Very deep.
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down to the bedrock, Chelsea.
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Bravo! Quite a sensory work out. Very well done.
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Thank you so much, Violet Lentz. I’m delighted you’ve enjoyed the piece.
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wow! absolutely brilliant
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Thank you. Delighted you enjoyed the piece.
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almost feels interdimensional. outstanding piece of writing
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Thank you.
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