shook up: looking better

Psychiatry 4: Acute Observations – Poem 40

she’s looking better
seems to know now
how to make a smile

I think she’s getting better

we first met in her room
on a visual observation round
two weeks ago
she held a flashlight
with a long string tied to the end
looked guilty
confessed that the string
was a fascination
she was trying to release

perhaps she could run it round her neck
pull tight

pull tight

then get away

but I think
she’s looking better now


she’s been fasted for anesthesia
her pills withheld
walks slowly along the corridor beside me
not speaking

up on the trolley
a name band
no jewelry
no false teeth no nail varnish

into the theatre suite
to sleep

relax the muscles
monitor heart check breath
dab the goo onto the electrodes


a shudder
some twitches


on to recovery



she’s still quiet
had a late breakfast and the morning meds
looks a little shook up
but I think
she’s better

I think she’s a little better now

© Frank Prem, 2016

Next – kick starting the morning



9 thoughts on “shook up: looking better

  1. the bit at the beginning …. about the flashlight … and string …. fascination and release?

    wow – that just blew my mind …. really ….. the way you’ve transcribed this – the words, the line breaks, it paints such a clear picture …. and it’s so powerful ….. odd and curious, mysterious and yet, telling in some way …..

    incredible piece in its entirety Frank

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      • Yes, I can appreciate this …. and I think your reflections/poems show your sensitivity and ability to sift through the “general” as it unfolds, and clue in to the bits that are “keys” …. which not everyone can do …. and of course, this can be both blessing and curse ….. but I am grateful and always curious to read these pieces 🙂

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